剑桥雅思16真题电子版pdf

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我们先一起看到题目：Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 4 The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

下边是学生作文：

The graph illustrates how plastic bottles are recycled.

Overall, the process requires a total of 9 steps*and a range of machineries are needed.

First of all, plastic bottles are thrown away into the trailerbeforethey are dumped into the trash car and transported to the recycling centre.Oncesorted out by hand, the wanted pile of plastic trash is compressed into blocksthat later iscrushed into small pieces by two spinning gears.

During step 5, crushed pieces are washed in a sinkbeforebeing subjected to the equipment that produces plastic pellets from the pieces.In the heating stage, the pellets are burnt into raw materialwhichis later collected and packed in bags.Eventually, the raw material is used to produce daily items*we use. When they are thrown away, the recycling process beginsagain.

1）黑体标注了作文的段间衔接，最后2段间并没有衔接（为了分段而分段）。

2）下划线部分标注了句间衔接的方法，做得很好。

3）这样也只写到了137个词，我相信考鸭拿到流程图普遍的问题就是，写不到字数。（可以给*处加入举例）

因为ta的写作目标分数是6.5，所以作文需要调整的地方不少。

下边是我的修改建议：

1）下图中④之前和⑤之后的差异：塑料瓶是否完整。

第三段第一句：In the early stage, plastic bottles remains whole.

第四段第一句：In the later steps, the plastic trash is reshaped.

3）给*处加入，

... 9 steps including crushing, washing and heating ...

... daily items such as T-shirts, recyclable plastic bags, bottle and pencils.

4）图中⑤和⑥都在crush，从小片变成更小片，所以可以用further衔接。

我在尽量保留原文的前提下，重写了上边的作文：

The graph illustrates how plastic bottles are recycled.

Overall, the process requires a total of 9 steps including crushing, washing and heating, and a range of machineries are needed.

In the early stage, plastic bottles remains whole. First of all, used plastic bottles are dumped in trailers. Once trash cars come and retrieve the trash from the trailers, it is transferred to recycling centres. In the sorting stage, plastic bottles are picked out, before being compressed into blocks.

In the later steps, the plastic trash is reshaped. The compact trash blocks are crushed into small pieces by two spinning gears before being washed. Further, the resulting pieces are subjected to a machine that cut them into plastic pellets, which are subsequently heated and transform into raw material. Raw material is packed in bags beforeit is eventually used to produce daily items such as T-shirts, recyclable plastic bags, bottle and pencils. When they are thrown away, the recycling process begins again.

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